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04-12-2020, 03:53 PM
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BaBa Main BaBa cHoDu BaBa....
.... Aa gya h. Waapis bhot pelenga ......
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BaBa Main BaBa cHoDu BaBa....
.... Aa gya h. Waapis bhot pelenga ......
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Bakwas writing skill.ek suggestion hai bro agar bura na mano to .kripa karke shabdon ka sahi se istemal kare nhi to puri story ka maza kirkira ho jayega .story padne me interesting nhi lagegi. Baki charecter wise to achi hai story bas thoda sa language par dhyan dena.mera apko hurt karne ka koi irada nhi hai. Na hi me koi writer hu jo story likh saku lekin fir bhi mujhe jo kami lagi so mene kah diya. Good luck for rest of your story
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